Today I decided to include a little blast form the past, for Fiction Friday. I wrote this novel called, Worlds Collide, exactly a year ago. I thought it would be fun to read over it, so I also included a little excerpt here for you all to read. This was my first family to create in a novel. While writing the father character, he reminded me a lot of the father in the Cooper Kid's Series, by Frank Peretti. Those books were a great inspiration to my writing, Escape from the Island of Aquarius being my favorite. Alright, read the excerpt and tell me what you think. Enjoy!
Excerpt from, Worlds Collide
Plane Crash
Victor
struggled to contain the panic that rose in his chest. Water began to
pour into the plane. Through the windows he could see them sinking
quickly into the ocean. He still had a sobbing Linus strapped to him,
and a parachute. His eldest son, Nathan, lay on the plane's floor, blood covering his
face. Jenny shook him screaming, his wife Elaine held his head in her hands,
struggling to pull him back to consciousness.
“Elaine!” Victor screamed across the noise.
She
looked up, horror in her eyes.
“Take
Linus,” He unstrapped the screaming boy, “I will take Nathan.
Jenny, grab all the life vests you can find, you will need them!”
Elaine
took Linus in her arms, as she threw the parachute off her back. Jenny
had an arm full of life jackets before Victor had time to think. He
stooped over Nathan's still form. He didn't have time to check if he was alive or not, they had to get them all out. Victor grasped Nathan's parachute
and stripped it off him.
“Elaine!
Get Jenny and Linus out now!” He called, as water began to
completely fill the plane.
The
water covered Nathan quickly, Victor struggled to drag the boy out.
He glanced behind him to see his wife and children gone, the exit
door torn open. He prayed they were safer than he was. He dragged
Nathan through the water now, trying to keep both of their heads
above water. He threw Nathan's arms over his shoulder, and began to
swim out of the opened door, that was now fully submerged in water. He searched for the
surface, trying to keep Nathan in his grasp. Cool air struck him in
the face as he came to the surface. He gasped in precious oxygen, and
pulled Nathan up. He looked around the wrecked plane and the ocean
for signs of his wife. None.
He saw in the distance, something
different. It took his brain a few seconds to finally register what
it was. Land, of some sort. Perhaps it was close enough to swim to.
He thanked God for the life vests, as he pulled Nathan behind him
holding his head up as he swam. He looked back at the wrecked plane.
It was almost completely covered by the crashing waves. A thought
struck him, the pilots had not gotten out. He looked frantically
around the wreck. Then he looked at his son's bloodied face. He would come back and find the pilots. He had to.
The
land was very close, in fact it took little time for Victor to make
it to the sandy beach. He dragged Nathan up onto it and laid him down
on the wet sand. He heard a yell and looked up to see Elaine and
Jenny come running, Linus ran behind. Elaine collapsed at Nathan's
side.
“Take
care of him. I need to go back for the pilots!” Victor said, as he
ran back into the the water.
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Hoep you all enjoyed it! Rereading this makes me relieved to realize I have improved. No mater how terrible you first couple novels may have been, remember that the more you write you are sure to improve, even if you can't see it.
Do you have any of those first novels you wrote that make you cringe to read?
